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Tuesday, 12 May 2015

The beast

We have been learning about how to write a strong beginning. Here is the beginning of one of my stories.


It was our 4th day on the Gold Coast. The house we were staying at was my grandparents. I was there with my cousins, Matthew and Jake, and my idiotic brothers Tom and Ollie.


Dad rushed through the door saying “Come here! Come here!” I couldn't believe we actually followed him because it was 9pm.


I strolled through the forest it was pitch black. Dad said “Where is that mutt?” in an annoying way. Suddenly out of the gloom, a big hairy beast launched at Ollie, who fell to the ground with a clump.  Dad jumped onto the mutt. He put a leash on it.  Tom and  Matthew picked up Ollie.


I could hear someone was shouting, calling the dog. "Ruby!"


We have been learning about how to write a strong beginning. Here is the beginning of one of my stories. 

1 comment:

  1. Haha Jack. I loved reading this. You have me gripped and wanting to read more....which means you did a great job of writing a strong beginning. Well done.

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